Malcolm and Dwayne are in competition for Yolanda’s love. Buying flowers would win her affection.

Change to more precise language. The puppy is so cute!

Make the sentence more clear and concise. You can get a free gift with purchase if you dash quickly to the store and are one of the first ten customers!

While it is fun to jump in puddles, leaves your shoes soggy.

“Don’t cry over spilled milk” and “killed two birds with one stone” is a common saying.

Change the idiom. Her pleas to her parents for a new computer fell on deaf ears.

Cleo and Harry are a great team because both always stick together.

Were leaving in five minutes.

When I went over to Fred’s house.

The many kitties rubber mice were adorable.