Rewrite the following sentence for concision and clarity. Sentence: Confirmation is given by the data concerning the rising rate of turnover in our department.

Which of the following correctly describes the pancreas?

i. – Name the stylistic errors made in the following wordy openings to a message.  ii. – Rewrite the sentence with clear and concise phrasing.   Sentence: It has come to my attention that we need to improve employee retention.

Which of the following lists the parts of the small intestine from the beginning to the end?

What type of contraction occurs when the muscle shortens?

For the three sentences and questions below, please answer both i. and ii. prompts. For each sentence you will (i) identify the errors, and (ii) provide a rewrite. Please include both parts in your answer for each example and appropriately label each part either i. or ii.

This question is another two-part question. (i) State what is wrong with the following sentence’s structure, and (ii) rewrite it more effectively. Sentence: Movements resulting from termination, layoffs, and leaves, recalls and reinstates, transfers in, transfers out, promotions in, promotions out, and promotions within are presently documented through the Payroll Authorization Form.

Rewrite the following sentence for concision and clarity. Sentence: A reduction in job-related accidents was achieved by an incentive program.

A petty cash fund requires less accuracy than a checking account.

i. – Name the stylistic error made in the following wordy closing to a message. ii. – Rewrite the sentence with clear and concise phrasing.   Sentence: Please do not hesitate to call with any questions.